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So there's this aspect of Afterwar which is sort of like a procedural. I mean we follow along as the brueaucrat does his job, wrangling with other bureaucrats, getting itineraries, interviewing candidates for placement programs . . . and it's my job to make this interesting. It should be tense, kind of suspenseful -- in this section -- the reader should be saying "yes, a disaster's in the offing, but which kind will it be? What's going to happen?"
Pacing is hard.
ANyway, it took me only 3-1/2 hours to get this bit done, and again, I stopped not because I met my quota but because I have to think about the next bit before I write it.
Meanwhile, last night I learned more about Bella and Chain. They live together in a flat which used to be several rooms in a residence hotel -- the landlord would really like to evict everybody and make a complete rework of the building, so he can rent it at high rent as live-work lofts. Meanwhile, the building is an uncomfortable compromise, retaining some of the character of the residence hotel, and, of course, Harry Smith lives in a studio downstairs!They unfortunately seem to have a dog named Monkey. There's actually a large number of people having the same experience as Bella, and Harry Smith is advising all of them not to cooperate. I don't know anymore if Bella is more critical than these others. Chain and Bella haven't been together all that long, and she doesn't know a lot of things about him, but she doesn't think he is a mystery because he's so guileless.
I would like to shake the dog named Monkey, but it seems to come with the package.
Pacing is hard.
ANyway, it took me only 3-1/2 hours to get this bit done, and again, I stopped not because I met my quota but because I have to think about the next bit before I write it.
Meanwhile, last night I learned more about Bella and Chain. They live together in a flat which used to be several rooms in a residence hotel -- the landlord would really like to evict everybody and make a complete rework of the building, so he can rent it at high rent as live-work lofts. Meanwhile, the building is an uncomfortable compromise, retaining some of the character of the residence hotel, and, of course, Harry Smith lives in a studio downstairs!They unfortunately seem to have a dog named Monkey. There's actually a large number of people having the same experience as Bella, and Harry Smith is advising all of them not to cooperate. I don't know anymore if Bella is more critical than these others. Chain and Bella haven't been together all that long, and she doesn't know a lot of things about him, but she doesn't think he is a mystery because he's so guileless.
I would like to shake the dog named Monkey, but it seems to come with the package.
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