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So I looked over Julia's synopsis and sent my suggestions and I hope they're any use at all. And I looked at the rap epic thing and decided that I wasn't going to change anything but typoes and formatting, and it's all packaged and ready to buy postage for.
And I haven't been keeping good track of how many words I'm doing on Afterwar but this chapter is at 6000 words or so and maybe half, a third, maybe a little more than half done. I spent a lot of time getting the sequence of events and the relationships among the threads of the story straight. There are three committees, each of which has at least two factions, but they don't all need full treatment, so it works out to two sides among the townspeople and one and a half among the repatriates, there is my protagonist and his wife who is pregnant and also trying to get resources for the school, which is one of the brekaing-point issues for the repatriates, and then there is the 2nd protagonist and his wife who is freaking out because her lover dumped her, and the child she is keeping out of school to comfort her, and the young school intern who it turns out conveniently is formerly the little girl in the earlier chapter who hijacked me --now she starts out with the hidden agenda of recruiting girls for the family business and ends up seeking asylum. And the 2nd protagonist's own story, which is about deciding to risk joining with the workers' committee, not because he's afraid of losing his job, etc., but because his own experiences lead him to think of all repatriate social organization as gangsterism. Is that enough threads?
Emma's going cold turkey off the pain meds for the knee because the doctor thinks they're causing the endless headache. And she's got the flu or something. She is not happy.
And I haven't been keeping good track of how many words I'm doing on Afterwar but this chapter is at 6000 words or so and maybe half, a third, maybe a little more than half done. I spent a lot of time getting the sequence of events and the relationships among the threads of the story straight. There are three committees, each of which has at least two factions, but they don't all need full treatment, so it works out to two sides among the townspeople and one and a half among the repatriates, there is my protagonist and his wife who is pregnant and also trying to get resources for the school, which is one of the brekaing-point issues for the repatriates, and then there is the 2nd protagonist and his wife who is freaking out because her lover dumped her, and the child she is keeping out of school to comfort her, and the young school intern who it turns out conveniently is formerly the little girl in the earlier chapter who hijacked me --now she starts out with the hidden agenda of recruiting girls for the family business and ends up seeking asylum. And the 2nd protagonist's own story, which is about deciding to risk joining with the workers' committee, not because he's afraid of losing his job, etc., but because his own experiences lead him to think of all repatriate social organization as gangsterism. Is that enough threads?
Emma's going cold turkey off the pain meds for the knee because the doctor thinks they're causing the endless headache. And she's got the flu or something. She is not happy.